Sunday, 29 May 2016






Autumn / ngahuru is well and truly here and this week we wrote poems to acknowledge the season. To begin our writing we had to stand outside on a cold autumn morning and look southward.  There in the distance we could see the Southern Alps and Aoraki, Mount Cook. To the west we could see the Tasman Sea rolling ashore. Our northern view was of the Twelve Apostles, the hills above Greymouth, also known as the two tuatara. We hope you enjoy our writing.
WALT use a range of language features such as simile, metaphor, alliteration and personification.
Context: Autumn Poetry
Success Criteria: We will write a free verse poem to express our experience of a Tai Poutini autumn.  The poem will include our choice of language features but it must also contain information that tells the reader where we are in the world. We may choose to use te reo Māori to enhance our writing.
Autumn/Ngahuru
Fern

9 comments:

  1. Greetings Ruma Tahi!
    You're words have really captured all the aspects of what you experience, we could particularly relate to the chill that takes your breath away a bit as you leave a warm classroom. Metaphor is definitely a powerful tool for drawing your reader into your experience. Two other things; we like the way you collect all your work in that format for people to access, is it a table and you embed it? And we think you have a super spot to observe some dramatic nature events, have you seen any water spouts lately? Thanks Ruma Waru

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  2. hi my name is Kaius I read Mathew R's poem about autumn.I like the way you added all the good detail.

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  3. Hi Ruma Tahi i really liked your poems about autumn they made me think that it was autumn for a second even though it is winter now. Maybe next time you could add some color to make it look more like autumn and to and to make people want to read it more.

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  4. Kia ora Matthew R
    I really enjoyed your poem. It was well written with excellent descriptive language.

    I did a poem about the Taniwha, the fierce maori legendary creature. I’m still editing it.

    You did a perfect job but maybe next time you could add some colours and pictures and make it eye-catching.

    Sincerely: Mackissah

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  5. Well done Sam I love your autumn poem it looks like you have tried to put as much effort into it as you can. Maybe next time you could possibly try to make it rhyme. Was it fun doing this? Where there any problems while you were doing this?
    From Lachlan at St Patrick’s School

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    1. Hello Lachlan

      Thank you Lachlan for commenting on my autumn poem. I have put a lot of effort in it and I am glad that you have acknowledged it. Next time I will try to make it rhyme.

      The fun part about making the poem was that we got to go outside and look for inspiration. There were some problems with some of the sentences that I had to change. Another problem was the title because I had to change it half way through so it makes sense. It was also annoying when I had no idea at all about what I was going to right until I really thought about it.

      Here is a challenge for St Patrick School create your own poem about the four seasons e.g. Summer, Winter, Autumn and Spring.

      - By Sam - Karoro School

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  6. Hola Madison
    What an amazing piece of writing!
    It is very descriptive and well thought through.
    I love how when you said slowly drift you emphasised it by parting the words.It made it that bit more interesting.
    Where did you get inspiration for some of the words?

    St Patrick’s-Samantha

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    1. Hello Samantha

      Thank you for replying on my piece of work. I thought that your comments were thoughtful and positive. Splitting the letters apart was my teacher’s idea, I thought it looked pretty too. I got the inspiration from the topic of Winter and Autumn. Thank you so much for replying on my piece of work, and I hope I get to see yours too.

      From Madison

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  7. Hola Madison
    What an amazing piece of writing!
    It is very descriptive and well thought through.
    I love how when you said slowly drift you emphasised it by parting the words.It made it that bit more interesting.
    Where did you get inspiration for some of the words?

    St Patrick’s-Samantha

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